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Re: Ichthyosaur poem
I like your ichi poem. I was about to offer you a
place in the comic book I publish, "Dinosaur Comics"
(TrilobiteComics.com) provided drawings could be
included with it, but then you said Fredericks was
putting you in Pre Times and so I said nothing.
I think you sould keep writing dinosaur poems and
letting us read them.
--- Neal Romanek <email@example.com> wrote:
> Nothing? Nothing at all? Remember, you're all
> forfeiting your right to
> say "this is fanciful crap" when it's published. Say
> it now and you'll
> feel better. I promise.
> On Aug 12, 2005, at 8:38 PM, Neal Romanek wrote:
> > I've just posted on my site a poem about a pod of
> > feeding. The literary merits are...well...not for
> discussion here
> > (I've got a team working on it day and night).
> It's one entry in a
> > book-in-progress of paleontological nature poetry.
> > Though I hope you get pleasure out of it, I'd be
> in your debt if you
> > all could also set your picks and brushes to
> digging at the poem from
> > a science perspective. I want the poetry to be
> true to the flavor of
> > pastoral and nature poetry, but have the whole
> thing rest on a firm
> > (even if unseen) bedrock of good, clear
> > Brainstorm, criticize, shake your heads
> disapprovingly, be cruel to be
> > kind. Your mission - perhaps the first of its kind
> in history! -
> > attack the paleontology of a poem!
> > So here's a URL:
> > Below is the actual text.
> > Many thanks,
> > -Neal
> > ICHTHYOSAURS FEEDING
> > An Ichthyosaur cow and her pod have cornered
> > a lagooning school of silver-scaled fish.
> > Agitating outboard tails, they cut loose,
> > the spiral cloud smashing.
> > A nod and the cow's snout swings wide,
> > toothy arc squared by jaw length,
> > chopsticking a glittering fish.
> > A shake -
> > as if to shake it dry,
> > as if to shake the eyes out -
> > and down it goes,
> > and she crows with a grand outside loop,
> > shooting into the milky blue
> > - making way for the others to deftly plunder -
> > zooms back in to further undo,
> > snapping down another one, or two,
> > then pops to the mercury ceiling.
> > She draws down a lungful of oh-too-rich air,
> > then from her reflection
> > recoils, acrobatic,
> > and knocks fish this way, that,
> > extracting bright bounty at will.
> > Upcoast currents deport the silver school,
> > amnesiac to its decimation.
> > Sun lulls the pod, fish-drunk, to spend
> > the day wrapped in gibbous lagoon.
> > The cow parries dopey, double-belly suitors,
> > diverting them to sisters, then
> > finally flaunting ventral white,
> > selects -
> > cheloniate paddles slapping,
> > broadcasting satisfaction over the sunny bed.
> > --Neal Romanek
> > Neal Romanek
> > http://www.nealromanek.com
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